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Writing Dialogues - Through Character Arguments!

3/31/2016

 
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Last week we developed our own characters and had them experience their first day of grade 6.  This week, you will again get to use your characters in a story but we’re going to focus on another part of the discussion that we had with Chris Tozier, dialogue!  Chris said that the easiest way to make your writing more clear is to follow the conventions for writing dialogue, specifically, quotation marks around speech and a new paragraph every time a different character is speaking.  For you blog post this week, I would like your character to get into an argument, either with their parent, best friend, sibling, that part is totally up to you.  Be sure that their personality shines through the argument and their flaw can show up too.  It can be funny, silly, serious; whatever you like but let’s practice writing dialogue!


Khushi
3/31/2016 01:08:06 pm

Last week's blog post was so much fun. I had a great time making my character and thinking about what my character was going to be like. I wasn't really such a big fan of reading or of creating stuff but that was only because I got annoyed when I couldn't figure out how to start my character and how my character should be. All of the confusion of mine went away when we talked to Chris Tozier. Since he is a professional writer he knew the do's and don'ts of writing. After talking to him I spent way more time making more stuff about my character Aariyah Marin. It was so much fun and I can't wait to start writing Aaliyah's argument with her younger sister named Lily Marin!

Here it is:

The Argument

“What is wrong with you Lily you are literally the rudest and most annoying sister in the world!”

“ I hope you fall off of a cliff!”

“Well it’s not my fault that you have problems with every person you meet!”

Wait Wait Wait let me start from the beginning. You see Lily and Aariyah have been in an ongoing argument since yesterday night. It all started when Lily came crying into Aaliyah's room because she had accidentally broken her phone. Kids these days have been all over their phones and they treat it like it’s their child. So anyways Lily apologized to Aariyah a lot of times but she just wouldn’t take it and that’s when the rivalry started. They haven’t talked since well… Until now! Let me just leave you back where you left off.

“You're usually always kind what’s wrong with you?”

“What’s wrong with me you're the one that comes into my room and steals my phone. I was just looking for it but I can stop now because I know who did it.”

What’s the big deal about your phone anyways?”

Well where do I start?

It has all of my important things on it. Like my school assignments and it has all of my pictures and contacts too. Plus it was a new Apricot 9c Phone and it had a built in case of POO!

*awkward silence*

“You know what I thought you were taking this seriously but in reality you aren’t you just make everything funny to get over it but you end up making things worse and more awkward! Well i hope that you are ready to tell our whole family what happened with both of us and how you keep annoying me for everything I do.

Mom, DAd Emma Lacey Jack Hunter! Please come down here Aariyah needs to tell you something.

Whispering NO lily you know I can’t talk in front of a lot of people and I get really embarrassed talking to especially our family.

Yeah what do you need honey

Tell them Aariyah tell them how you want me to get in trouble don't you?

I, I can't do this anymore I'm going back to my room! goodnight everybody.

Never mind. Thanks for coming down but it’s alright I have things under control

Ok we’ll just be upstairs if you need us.

Listen I’m just here to get some poutine you don’t need to tell them again.

*Lily starting to cry*

“ I’m trying to be nice! I apologized and I said that I could buy you a new phone with all the money that I saved up but you never forgive”

I know what you're going to do now you're going to tell mom and dad so that they can ground me and take away all my stuff too and you know how they are about buying new electronics”

I’m sorry Lily you knew I had everything of mine on that phone and you broke it.

I know that it was an accident and I’m so sorry for making you feel even worse than you already do. I just caught up in how much that phone meant to me I’m so sorry and I hope that you forgive me’

Thanks and I’m sorry I promise I’ll buy you a new phone and will never do anything like this again also It’s ok I know that you never act like that and I was just waiting for you to get back to your senses and be yourself.

*Both hug*

Well I’m glad that that’s over this has been going on for so long that they refused to sit at the same dining table as each other. Well I have to go now but I hope that they have something to relate too to solve their problems!

I definitely had so much fun writing this piece. It was way easier to write it especially since I could relate. I know that my story wasn't that exciting not story's are for everybody. I write this on a document too so if you want to see who's part is who's and get a better understanding of both my character and my story I'm am going to put the links for the documents.Before I go let me just end with a quote by someone I don't know who but it is "The love of a family is life's greatest blessing.

Links:

Story: https://docs.google.com/a/hdsb.ca/document/d/1vyO38CvxUkSEnUEuuCOHYDLem9fmfsetJl1BeeXjOUg/edit?usp=sharing

Character:
https://docs.google.com/a/hdsb.ca/document/d/1vyO38CvxUkSEnUEuuCOHYDLem9fmfsetJl1BeeXjOUg/edit?usp=sharing

Peace out girls scout!

~Khushi

i'm really confused, there is no quotations and it seems like they are talking.
4/3/2016 09:05:16 am

it doesnt make sense

Uhmmmm rude.
4/3/2016 01:59:57 pm

You could have made that a little nicer.

KHUSHI
4/3/2016 02:24:19 pm

You may need to read it from the doc because the blog post add all the right marks.

Sydney
4/6/2016 02:03:38 pm

Good Job:)

Don't be mean, she didn't cause any harm
4/7/2016 05:23:54 pm

Yerin
3/31/2016 04:27:19 pm

Now that I have a character created, I can have so much fun adding on to her, and making her my own! I have learned so much about developing my writing skills,thanks to Mr.Tozier!

My arguement is with my character, Hazel's older sister Thea.

"ARGHHH Can you just stay out of my life!?"

"Well I'm sorry I was born!" I snapped back. "All I did was use your mascara!"

I don't know what happened. One moment I was calmly talking with my sister and the next, she's yelling at me like broke her phone,I would not want to be around when that happens.

"It's not just that Hazel, everytime you're around, you mess up everything!" She dramatically threw herself onto her bed. "When Andy came over to study, you served him a pineapple smoothie! He's allergic to pineapple!!!"

"You weren't even studying, and plus it was mango and pineapple."

"What's the difference!? You are so annoying,I wish you would just die!!"

Tears welled up in my eyes, "I,I know you don't mean that." I stuttered.I felt like I was just hit by a 100 pound boulder. I started sobbing like a baby,and when I cry, it can be heard from the next continent. That's what I hate about myself, whenever I cry I completely let it all out, and I can't stop myself.

Thea slapped a hand across my mouth.
"Stop it!" she yelled. "Be quiet, I'll pay you $5!, $10!"

My mom must've heard my muffled screams, because I could hear her stomping up our creaky stairs, just like she always does when Thea and I are argueing.

"Girls, in the hallway now!" she yelled from the staircase.

I shuffled through the doorway and Thea trailed after me, never taking her glaring eyes off of me.

"Thea what did you do this time." my mom said, obviously annoyed.

"What did I do?! It was Hazel! She keeps ruining everything!"

I put on my surprised face.

"Mom, Thea got mad at me for no reason, I just wanted to try her makeup" I lowered my voice to a whisper. "I think she's going through that phase again."

My mom sighed.

"Thea you're supposed to be the role model,please act like it now."

"I wish dad were here! He would know that I'm innocent!"
And with that she ran to her room and slammed the door. Probably about to text her friend about how "horrible of a sister" I am.

Mom pressed her palm to her forehead.

I grinned. "How about some cookies?"

She displayed a small smile and put her arm around me as we walked down stairs togethor.

~Yerin

Good Job you are such a good writer!
4/4/2016 09:13:55 am

The Ending was not so great try making it more catchy!
4/4/2016 03:48:19 pm

That's really rude!
4/4/2016 03:59:23 pm

You could have made that a little bit more nicer because from my opinion I think Yerin did a great job.

Yerin
4/5/2016 06:40:57 am

Thank you for your comment, I will try to make a better ending next time, I was really tired while writing this, and I wanted to sleep, so I just came up with something! I will try to make it more "catchy" next time.

Emily
4/2/2016 02:51:47 pm

Last Week's blog post was creating your character and this week it is about dialogue. Mine is not two people yelling and arguing instead they are arguing over text. So here is the link to my argument!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/10I3WiWbw65Otc7VPdO4abiqWEby2wl-WhG-GXR3K0BQ/edit

~ Emily

Emily (Again)
4/2/2016 02:53:17 pm

I did on Docs because my layout would be messed up if I did it right on the blog.
~Emily

It was really good Emily, cool layout!
4/4/2016 09:14:50 am

you r fun-ee
4/4/2016 09:15:50 am

I lik u

i like it
4/3/2016 05:40:26 am

Good Job
4/3/2016 06:56:07 am

That was sooooooo good.
4/5/2016 04:20:03 pm

WOW!

Your story slays.
4/4/2016 09:19:29 am

Love it!

Chloe
4/6/2016 02:37:33 pm

It's really good Emily

Blake
4/3/2016 07:42:12 am

Today I will be telling you about my character George Peterson's argument. Here it is. George's argument was with his friend Chris.

It all started when George's hockey team played Chris' hockey team in the finals and to make that long story short George's team was down by 1 goal with 5 seconds left and George deked out Chris and he was on a breakaway, George thought he had lots of time but then Chris tripped George and the referee did not call a penalty and Chris' team won the championship. Now George is mad at Chris for tripping him.
"Wake up" George's mom said. "Ok" George said. George got changed and then headed downstairs but he was in no rush because he was still mad at Chris and he had to walk with him to school. After George ate breakfast he got his bag packed put his coat on and started walking to meet Chris,Matthew and Edward. When he saw them there was an awkward moment of silence and then Edward and Matthew said "Hi" So did George but Chris was silent. When they got to school Chris and George did not talk for the first 2 periods then there were ball hockey intramurals. It was the finals and guess what, George's Warriors were playing Chris' Knights It was a 15 minute game. Chris had won the face off against George and that started the game. With 5 minutes left George had scored bar down to make it 1 to 0. Then with 5 seconds left Chris was on a breakaway and George tripped him this time and again there was no call George's team had won the ball hockey championship. Then they all shook hands, even Chris and George. Then George said "sorry". So did Chris, and just like that they weren't mad at each other anymore. That was the end of that argument.

Javed
4/3/2016 06:47:30 pm

That's really good

Javed
4/3/2016 07:02:56 pm

We last left off when Masons classmates surprised him with a surprise party for his birthday and he was thrilled!

After his classmates made him all pumped up, Mason was jumping with joy in the hall. HE WAS SO HAPPY THAT HE DIDN'T HEAR THE BELL RING FOR THE NEXT CLASS!!!! He ran straight to math class.His teacher" Mr.Pandanski" is the meanest most disgusting man there is. Sometimes he would yell specifically at Mason just for going out for break. As soon as Mason walks into math class.
Mr. Pandanski automatically start to pick on him saying "You're so late you now have to stay in for recess and scrape off all the rotten gum under the desks. That means the whole SCHOOL!!"

"But why?" says Mason.

"Well, you're late for my class and on the first day of grade 6. Besides, you don't want me to screw up your birthday.
"YOU ALREADY HAVE!!!" says Mason as he starts to cry and run away from class.
"Mason wait!" says Mr.Pandanski. Mason stops in the hall. As Mr.Pandanski starts walking to Mason, Mason knew that he was in trouble but he didn't think about it.
"You're the worst teacher EVER!!" says Mason.
"Well at least I don't run away like a wimp" Next thing you know, you see Mason running away from school.While Mason was running away, he starts to have uncontrollable hiccups again.
When he got home from a disaster, he thought " If no one treats me the way I am, then why should my parents do the same.Mason starts running in the garage and grabs a back-pack and a whole bunch of food and drink supplies and his hiking gear.
He says to him self"I guess i'm going on a journey.

Nicole
4/4/2016 01:02:57 pm

This chapter starts off when Joey just played basketball.

Everyone was laughing and pointing at me and I got very mad and frustrated. I went outside to get a drink to leave the disaster when my best friend came up to me and started talking.

“Wow… I never knew… Wow…” Charlie was saying.

“I know, I kno-” He cut me off. He never does that.

“What happened” He said that while he was laughing at the same time.

“I just can’t play basketball!” I say trying not to sound embarrassed.

“We can all see that!” He isn’t being that supportive friend I thought he would be. “No offence but that was really bad Joe.” I know it’s really bad but it hurts when you hear it out loud.

“I thought you would be more supportive. You don’t know how fast this is going to spread to the whole school.”

“Calm do-” his phone just got a tweet. “Looks like it already did. Check this out!” He showed his phone to me and it has a video of me playing basketball that has the comment “check out the chicken playing basketball.” I ran into the changeroom super frustrated with Charlie following.

“This isn’t like you Charlie. You are always supportive, what’s gotten into you?” He tried to say something back but I had to stop him. “Friends stick up for each other but you're doing to total opposite. Yesterday we had the best time playing outside fro the last day of summer and now you laughing at me and liked the post on twitter of me.”

“Joe, I’m really sorry.”
“That’s not gonna cut it, I thought friends stick up for each other but clearly they do not.” That was the last thing I said to him before running out of the change room. I hope, I really hope that everything is back to normal tomorrow because losing your best friend is harder than getting laughed at.

Great argument!
4/4/2016 05:46:44 pm

Cool

That's really good
4/6/2016 02:32:23 pm

Rayna
4/4/2016 06:13:15 pm

In my last chapter my character Megan found her first friend. Her name was Stacey. She was the girl Megan talked to on the bus. Now Megan and Stacey are in a huge fight. This is how it all started...

Hey Stace. Wanna hang out today?” I asked.

“Sorry I can’t. I have soccer practice.” She replied.

“Maybe after? I said.

“I can’t, After practice I have to do my homework.” She answered.

“Oh, well I’ll talk to you later.” I said as I opened my front door.


2 hours later…..

I was walking my dog and passed Stacey’s house. But it was really weird because I saw Stacey even though she is supposed to be at soccer practice. Why would she lie to me?

“Why aren't you at soccer practice.” I said very harshly.

“Oh, ummm….. It got cancelled.” She said.

“Then why aren't you doing all that “ homework” you have to catch up on?” I said.

“Well…I was taking a break.” She said.

“Oh my bad I guess--” I said but then got cut off.

“Stacey come in now you've been outside for over 2 hours!” Stacey's mom said, then walked back into the house.

“ OH MY GOSH Stacey how could you lie to me? Am I so bad that you don't want to hang out with me? Seriously you just lied to me 2 times! I can't believe you. And to think that I was going to apologize. Do you even play soccer, or is that a lie too. And all that homework, a lie? You know what--.” Then Stacey cut me off. Must run in the family.

“ Look I'm sorry. I - I just can't stand how you always want to hang out. You always say I'm your bff but have you ever wondered if you were mine? Well I have a lot of friends. And well you don't. It would be nice to hang out with them. But you always want to hang out. I'm tired of it- I'm tired of YOU!” She said. Practically shouting.

“I can't believe you just said that. You're my BF- you are my friend. Correction you were my friend.

“Well believe it because we are through being friends.” Stacey said.

“You know what I'm not going to stand here and let you talk to me like this. Bye.” I said while walking away.

This is the worst day of my life. I can't believe this is happening. Now I'm back to being the one and only “Friendless Megan”. What a great day.

-Rayna💜

Haider
4/5/2016 05:35:43 pm

Bach and his friends were playing outside in the summer. They were playing soccer in the soccer field.

"PASS!! PASS!!", said Bach.

"NO! I wanna score, you go there and distract the goalie," said Chop.

"Are we going to McDonalds after this," whispered Bach.

"Yes if you go distract the goalie," whispered Chop.

"Deal!, I will go distract the goalie by telling him if he wants to come to McDonalds", whispered Bach. Bach ran to the goalie. "Hey Fredrick! Do you want to go to McDonalds after we are done playing soccer?," said Bach.

"Sure just don't tell my mom or dad that we are going to McDonalds," said Fredrick.

"Why not?," Said Bach.

"Because I am on a diet and you know what they say... more eating, less diet." whispered Fredrick right in Chop's face.

"Ok we will see you after soccer," said Chop.

Meanwhile after soccer...

"I will take 2 Big Macs and 1 Mountain Dew, Said Fredrick.

"I will take 3 Happy meals and 1 chocolate milk, said Bach.

"And I will take 5 BLT's", said Chop.

Bach, Chop, and Fredrick found a place to sit and ate their food.

After eating in McDonalds, Bach, Chop, and Fredrick were walking home Everybody went to their house and had an awesome day.

The End.







Logan
4/6/2016 12:40:29 pm

Last weeks homework was very fun because we made our own charters. Mine was Billy power and he had to go to school after the long summer break. But if you think the first day was bad you should look at his second day.

As Billy power woke up and got out of bed Then he ran to the bathroom to take a shower but as he was running to take a shower his brother came out of the room. Then they tied so they got into a big brother fight. Billy has the little brother and then he said to his older brother Demarcus that I was here first. Then Demarcus said “no I was here first” and then Demarcus said “respect your elders”. Then Billy said you are only older then by 2 minutes and likes me more than you. Billy and Demarcus got in a bigger argument but when they were arguing Billy’s sister went right around them and the went into the bathroom so they didn’t get to use the bathroom first. Then they finally stop because there sister already in bathroom as they were getting dressed there sister came out of the bathroom and then Billy ran and then got the bathroom second. Finally the time was for school and Demarcus didn’t even get to take a shower😠. Then when they went to school Demarcus was late and then he got in trouble by his teacher. Then didn’t have any break because he was late.

Aidan Roseland-Barnes
4/6/2016 01:49:34 pm

If my character got in an arguement it would look like this:

If you dont remember me, my name is Jeff. On my way to class I was called down to the office. I was nervous because I didn't know if I was in trouble or not. I went to the office and the principal asked me to join him in his room. The principal had another kid in the room. It was Bach. Bach was one of my friends. I shut the door and sat down. I was sort of shaky. The principal started speaking "Now, the only problem here is..."I started to panick and I rudely interupted him saying "Am I in trouble?" I said as I was freaking out. The principal looked at me and said "No you aren't. Now, what I was saying is this project is too complicated."
That would be a situation when my characters flaw comes in.
~{Aidan Roseland-Barnes}~

Chloe
4/6/2016 02:33:15 pm

Ding the bell went and all the students got up to go to the next class. I almost made it to the next class (which is math) but 2 of mean girls came up and started to talk to me.

“Why are you walking so fast?” asked the short girl in a mean tone.

I didn't answer and kept on walking.

“Why are you not answering?” said the tall girl.

I turned around and didn’t speak! Finally I said “why does it matter?”

“Wow you don’t have to be so rude,” yelled the short girl.

“Anyway we better get to class,” said the tall one.

“Meet us at lunch in the cafeteria,” yelled the short one in a angry voice.

I took a seat at the front of the class (the only one left) and waited till the teacher started to talk.

“How about we go around and say our names and our favourite colour? Than we can play a game,” said the teacher.

The mean tall girl started and said, “Hi i’m isabelle and my favourite colour is pink.”

Then the short mean girl went and said, “Hi i’m kate and my favourite colour in blue.”

Finally the bell rang and I met Isabelle and Kate in the cafeteria. My stomach started to feel sick. I saw them and went up to them!

“You made it finally,” kate complainted.

“Why do you always have to be rude?” I yelled.

“I’m not rude,” whined kate.

“Yeah you are,” I yelled again.

When I said that she picked up the cupcake she got in her lunch and threw it at my face. It hit me and stained my favourite white top. I then picked up my water bottle undid the lid and poured the water all over her. The tall one then threw mashed potatoes at me.

Over my shoulder I could hear a kid yell “food fight!!!!”

Food was going everywhere and shirts were getting wrecked. Everyone that was involved got sent to the office and now I’m sitting in detention.

Rayna
4/6/2016 06:30:59 pm

Nice job, very well written!👌🏻👌🏻

Monica
4/6/2016 02:45:42 pm

My argument is with Lucy and her sassy neighbor Macy.

"GET YOUR FEET OF MY LAWN" said 14 year old Macy, Lucy's Next door neighbor.

"Yikes! I am not even doing anything" I said

"I can't believe I have to babysit you,again and for the record I am not even allowed to." said Macy

"Uh, can we just go inside already? I am so bored."

"Well you know what, you should have got some toys to play with,Loser" she smirked

" I don't even know why my mom trusts you?" I snapped back

" Lets take a pic" she said

"Why?"

"Because It will get like a 1,000,000 likes on Insta."

"What's Insta." I said just to annoy her

"INSTAGRAM" she yelled back

"Wow you are so dumb" she said, annoyed

I glanced at her while she took a selfie and made it a hashtag
#2FAB4U! I rolled my eyes!

" Can you please stop being uppsessed with yourself and care about the person you are babysitting for once!?"

"Hmm lets see, Do I care about you... NO" she said sarcastically

"Come on we are going inside" she demanded

When we went inside she sat on the couch and started watching Gilmore Girls,

" So... What should I do?" I questioned
"Go in Maybelle's room, do something you weirdo! she said

Maybelle was her younger sister,My best friend out of school and the thing I like about her was that she hated Macy as much as I did, and sometimes even more.

" Okay.?!" I exclaimed

Right then the doorbell rang and it was my mom.

"yes" I signed of relief

Macy opened the door and she lied about everything!

"How did she do?" said my Mom

"OMG she was great we spent so much time together, playing with her barbie's and watching Dora!" she excitingly said

"WHAT!?" my brain exploded
I did not do anything like that with her I thought in my mind

"Come on" Said my Mom

"Okay" I said

My mom said Thank you to Macy even though she didn't even do anything and I was happy to be out of Macy's torture journey!
~Monica

Yerin
4/7/2016 12:39:54 pm

Nice!

Connor #AKA ?
4/6/2016 03:05:36 pm

Bryan T. Amazing was spending the day off at his friend, Ham's place. After resting, Ham asked Bryan if he wanted to play Super Smash Bros. with him, but Bryan wanted to play Super Mario Maker. Bryan said that he wanted to play a different game, and Ham didn't react nicely. Ham got out his malt bag (it was stale) and used it as a mace, and Bryan reacted quickly by doing that cool move in "Matrix", and luckily he avoided it, and grabbed the malt bag and threw it in the corner. Ham yelled that Bryan was a brony (which was an insult to Bryan) and then Bryan said that Ham's face looks like a Lego brick.

"Your hair looks like a sea sponge!"

"You made the Joker stop laughing!"

"You should suck poop!"

"At least I don't eat dead leaves, Bryan!"

When Ham's mom came into the scene, she kicked Bryan out of the house, and he now has to do chores! Oh no!

Tom
4/6/2016 05:14:46 pm

It was sunday Jay called his friend Thomas if he want to come to my house and play basketball.

"Hi Thomas this is Jay, do you want to come to my house and play basketball?" I said.
"Sure!" said Thomas.
10 minutes later.....

' Ding, Dong' the door bell ring I open the door, It is Thomas!
I go ware my shoe and tell my mom that I am playing basketball with my friend.
I got outside, "Do you want to play some shooting?" I said to Thomas.
"OK, but what's the rule?" said Thomas.
"The rule is: we draw some dots at where ever you want that we could possible shoot the basket, If you shoot the ball in you move to the next dot. Who ever finish the first WIN!" I said.

So we all start from the very left side. Thomas shoot first he got the ball in he moved to the next dot, it's my turn and I almost got the ball in, a long time later Thomas won!

We are tired and hot so I asked Thomas if he want to drink some lemonade and he said yes so I grab 2 cans of lemonade from the freezer.

After relax we are playing 1 VS 1 game, after 20 minutes I won the game.
" It is time to go home!" my mom said, I said good bye to Thomas and I go home, I have a great day with Thomas!.

Kai
4/7/2016 01:26:39 pm

Flaws,
(The friend) Vehon- Likes ponies
(Main Character) Gordon- Stubborn

One evening Gordon was feeling bored. Eventually he decided to call his friend Vehon over. When Vehon came, he didn't feel so welcome. Everybody was fighting and Vehon wanted to leave. They got settled in later on and played some video games. They didn't know what game to play though,

Vehon- "Let's play my little ponies!"

Gordon- "I think that NHL 16 is a lot better than a girl game."

Vehon- "A girl game, Oh yeah you don't even want to go their, well, guess what NHL is......... Actually its just hockey, but take that back, that was rude."

Gordon- "Vehon if you don't play NHL than you will become a ponie."

Vehon- "Really??? Than I'm never playing NHL! If you don't play ponies, than you will become a hockey player!"

Gordon- "I already play hockey Vehon."

Vehon- "Oh, than you will become a piece of broccoli."

Gordon- "No I won't, just give me the game."

Vehon- "Never, I swear to the majestic fluffy ponie gods that you shall be banned from my House!"

Gordon- "This is actually my house Vehon."

Vehon- "Oh, than why didn't you just say so."

Vehon snatched NHL 16 from Gordon's hands and snapped both discs in half. He went upstairs for a few minutes and came down with only one disc.

Vehon- "This is better."

Vehon handed Gordon the 2 games glued together and they put the disc in.

Gordon- "You broke it you Dummy!

Vehon- "Yeah right"

Gordon and Vehon watched the ps4 explode in seconds.

Vehon- "1,4,d712,095."

Gordon- "Your not counting properly Vehon."

Vehon- "Oh yeah! Well you try!"

The 2 boys watched as the t.v. flickered until a game appeared on the screen. They both grabbed their remotes and played NHL ponies together.








Lucas
4/7/2016 06:03:04 pm

Last week was really fun writing the short story's for our characters in their first day of grade six. It was really fun making up my characters attitude and personality. For me the thing that was the hardest was making up a flaw for my character. I found that challenging because I wanted it to be something creative and unique but not something to crazy because then I would have trouble fitting it into my story. But even though it was challenging it was still really fun because you can make you own story how ever you want it to be.

Just remember my characters name is Damien Alexandrian.

And Damien's flaw is that if he gets dared to do something he can't not do it.


I woke up on a Monday morning like I usually do which is once my alarm goes off I press the snooze button about probably 8 times until I hear my mom yelling form downstairs

"Damien are you still asleep?!"

Once I hear those words I now it is time to get up so I drag my self out of bed put my clothes on half asleep and then brush my teeth. When I take my first step down the stairs but my legs are still asleep so I wobble trying to keep my balance going down the stairs but I trip over my own feet and fall strait on my face and I can hear the splat as I fell on the ground.

I hear my mom running from the kitchen.

"Damien are you Okay?!"

" I'm fine mom" I say but that really isn't true my face is hurting really bad right now but I don't want my mom to be worried and act out.

Even though I said that I was fine my mom rushed to the kitchen to get me an ice pack. I didn't want to fight with her so I just said "thanks mom" and grabbed the ice pack and put it on my forehead.

For some reason my mom rushes into the kitchen and grabs a phone and said

"Mark don't worry it is going to be okay"

My mom dialect a number on the phone and it sounded like she was in a hurry and she dialled the number fast and the number was only three numbers.

"Did you just call 911!?" I yell

" mark I am doing it for your safety" she yells back at me.

" didn't you here me I SAID IM FINE," I yell

"MARK DO NOT YELL AT ME" she says

" I DONT CARE I WILL YELL AT YOUNIF I WANT TO" I yell

" MARK I AM YOUR MOTHER YOU DO NOT TALK TO ME LIKE THAT"

" don't talk to me" I say

As soon as I say that my mom runs upstairs and starts to cry. I fell really really bad but also mad because I made my mom really sad and she was just worried.

" MOM WAIT!" I yell

But as soon as in say that the paramedics come into my house with a stretcher and take me away and now I am going to be in the hospital without my mom and it is all my falt because I was really mean to her.

I lay in my hospital bed just thinking about what just happened and how I just yelled at my mom Because she was worried. I lay their for 5 hours and then all of the sudden I hear the door open and it was my mom.


-Lucas 😀😀😀😀😀😀




paul
4/7/2016 06:13:06 pm

Rinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnng awww be quiet I said to my alarm I don't want to get up it's a saturday I want to sleep in I am so exhausted from my first week of school. I just want to sleep in tell 10:05 thats all im asking.

Wake up Mat be quiet I said quietly it's time to go to your swimming lessons come on come rrrrrrrrrrrrr I don't want to go to my stupid swimming lessons they won't help me in life they are just a waste of time. Hey you watch your language I didn't say anything bad god you are so over protective that's it go to your Rome but I have soccer I don't care go I hate you . 4 days later I sorry mom its ok you were just mad.

NOAH
4/7/2016 06:39:34 pm

Creating the character was really entertaining and it was fun deciding who you wanted to create with no outlines or boundaries, so when I saw that our blog post was related to our characters that we made last week I was very exited and happy so here is my argument between Donovan and his dad:

"Get Me my coffee" Donovan said when he walked downstairs at 9:27 on Saturday morning.

"You know, most people say hello before they ask for something and they usually end with a word that you probably have no idea what it is.." Donovan cut him off bye saying

"What... I was just remembering how boring you are when you talk"
Donovan said in a sassy, respectful way"

"so anyway,... I am going back upstairs, bring me my coffee after you make it of course, and wait I was going to say something but I forget, now I remember. Make my coffee 32 degrees, last time it was only 31.8 and frankly that is undrinkable"

"Donovan i'm waiTING" he said singing

"For what" Donovan said in a snarky tone

"For a word, that people say when they give you a favor" his dad said

"HA" Donovan sad

"Why are you laughing" Donovan's dad questioned Donovan"

"This is no laughing matter" He said seriously

"You gotta be kidding me" he said in a surprised way

"I'm dead serious" Donovan's dad said

"I will give you two hints it starts with "P" and is 6 letters" he said like he was talking two a baby

"Pizza" Donovan said

"No" He quickly responded

"Even a new born baby could get this" he said again like he was talking to a baby (but he does act like one"

"Come on take another guess" he said encouragingly

"Pie" He said back

"6 letters, come on were you even listening" His dad said

"No" Donovan responded

"All I heard was food"

"I DIDN'T EVEN SAY ANYTHING ABOUT FOOD" he said in an annoyed way

"calm down,... take a chill pill" Donovan said

"He's right John, calm, calm down" Donovan's dad whispered to himself

"Okay lets take another go at it, try again and I said it has 6 letters and starts with a "P" " His dad said trying to calm down from what happened a few seconds ago

"Parked"

"No"

"Placed"

"No"

"I KNOW IT" Donovan said relived"

"okay, okay what is it" His dad said exited

"are you ready,..." Donovan said

"YES" his dad said

"Plasma" Donovan said

"NO"



3 Hours later



"Plank" Donovan said in a tired voice

"No" Donovan's dad said in a tired voice

"pliers" Donovan said again

"No" Donovan's dad said again

"Plenty" Donovan said

"No" Donovan's sad dad said

"Did we not raise you right" Donovan's dad asked Donovan"

"No" Donovan said like he was proving a point

"for my first birthday I only got 100$" Donovan said

"I should of got at least 500$" Donovan said

"..." his dad was about to say something but then the butler interrupted him by saying

"Sorry to interrupt sir, but could I please have some help I cant reach the top shelf were the cleaning supplies are" the butler said

"I KNOW" Donovan said

"Because of what the butler just said"

"No, I was going to say ponies" Donovan said

"NO" his dad said

"good answer but no" Donovan's dad said again


10 HOURS LATER



"Can I check a dictionary" Donovan said

"fine, just fine"

Donovan grabbed a dictionary and started to say " Guessed that, Guessed that, Guessed that" "The only word I haven't guessed in the dictionary is I a word I have never seen before I think it is pronounced "ple-ase"

"Dad are you crying" Donovan asked

"I'm just so happy"


*Hugs Donovan*


Don't threat over the small things


- Noah


:)


:0

Sydney
4/7/2016 06:49:29 pm

The next morning:
I walked into school not as nervous as yesterday. For once, the rain was not getting me down. I was excited to see my new friend Zoe. The only thing I didn’t expect was to walk into the class and see her and her sidekicks; Katrina and Kate looking at me with evil eyes. I said “Good morning” with a smile. They did not seem to take this greeting very well. Then I cautiously took as step back and asked “what’s wrong?”

Katrina said “Oh, I’ll tell you what’s wrong…” Zoe interrupted and said “I thought you actually liked us...why did you say you missed your old house?”
“what are you talking about?”.

Kate chimes in “you tweeted last night about missing your old house soooooooo much”, “sorry” I said…”I didn’t think that would hurt your feelings”. I took a deep breath thinking to myself, this is not going to go well.

Then Zoe shouted “well actually it did, TO THINK YOUR WERE EVER MY FRIEND, NOW YOU DON”T EVEN THINK I HAVE FEELINGS?”

The whole class was staring at me, I felt the colour leave my face. All I wanted to do was hide in a corner and avoid this situation. But missing my friends isn’t that bad..I was just expressing my feelings. Why is this happening, I thought these girls were so nice and now they are making me feel like the mean friend. I was taught to always talk things through an never leave a conversation when I am upset.

I said to the girls “Sorry you were hurt that I missed my friend from Portland but it doesn’t mean I like you any less.”

All three girls look at me and said at the same time - well you lost your chance to be our friend and we LIKE YOU A LOT LESS!!!!

That made me so angry..out of nowhere I said “Well I don’t want to be your friend then!” I turned away to run to the bathroom and someone had just shut the classroom door and I hit it so hard and then everything went black.

Salma
4/7/2016 07:11:11 pm

Last week's blog post was so much fun to do! I was having so much fun describing my character and creating a flaws and personalities for her! Anyways let's begin with the argument that Alison gray had with her parents

argument:

April 24,2014

Today was going to be a boring day at school! Well really every day is boring but especially today all we are doing is going to an assembly and having Spanish for the last 3 periods!

“Oh hey umm,umm Ali..Ali....Alison”! A girl from behind me said!


“Oh hey” I replied back not even noticing who it was.


“Mr.Brovard told me to tell you that you have to stay in for break since you didn't complete your assignment yesterday at 3rd period” she explained


“Seriously! There was no internet in my computer so I literally had to wait 30 minutes till it finally came back on”, I answered back


“Sry, I guess but anyways, I got to go eat my food so hopefully see you at French”she said calmly

Why,why, just why! This is the worst day ever. I can't believe this is actually happening to me! What can go worse today?


"4 hours later"

I was so happy school was finally done! I got my project finished and now I am ahead of the whole class in social studies!I couldn't wait to go back home! Ding! The doorbell went !

“Oh Hey mom,hey dad “

“Oh Hey sweetie, how was your day at school” my mom replied


“Good I guess”, I whispered


“Well hope your having fun! Oh also I have some news to tell you! I will be missing ur dance competition and hockey tournament today because I just heard your little brother has an assembly”! She said


“But,mom this is my last dance competition in the whole year”!


“I know honey,but you younger brother has an assembly and I really would love to see it”. She explained


“Of Course you do,it's not like you even care about What I ever did anyways. I said, running upstairs and slamming the door shut”.

“I hate it soooo much when parents always just go to your younger siblings activities and always miss yours be have apparently their activities are more “important”it's just not fair! Wait wait wait….I got it! Since I can't go to dance or hockey I will just sneak out”.

Aidan
4/8/2016 11:35:41 am

Last week's blog post was ok I don't like to create my character

Amber
4/12/2016 04:20:31 pm


Chapter 2

Autumn's Perspective
I know I, Autumn can be pushy sometimes, well not sometimes, more like all the time! But anyways i really like this boy named Josh and he is really funny, smart, cute, no way did i really just say to myself that Josh is cute? Well than if that is how i feel… I need to tell either Josh or Morgan! But witch one do I talk to about it? I mean Morgan likes him too, but well EVERYONE likes Josh. If i talk to Josh, about him… It will be AWKWARD! Josh’s parents are divorced, and i only know that because we were friends… That is my only secret that only me myself and i know! Please don’t tell Josh i told you that, if you told him he would well i am just going to really lighten up what he said ‘ He said that if i told anyone he would pet me like a puppy’ That isn’t good! Anyways i have decided to tell Margaret how I feel about Josh! Wohoo! Happy times, happy times on the way! Later when i got home, April was there with my favorite nieces, May, Tigerlily, and June! She also had brought over Amanda, my least favorite sister! She and Rachel, her best friend who is Margarets big sister. Amanda, yelled at me¨Autumn where have you been¨ She SCREAMED! ¨None of your business big sis!¨ ¨ Yes it autumn!¨ ¨ Fine i am not talking to you anymore!¨ ¨ Fine with me!¨ Amanda Screamed
-Amber

Cali
4/12/2016 06:15:24 pm

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